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aggienautI've got to scamper off to work basically asap, but the latest paper I've been working on is pretty much finished. Yeah its kinda crappy and more like a narrative than a thesis but hey I'm at the end of my rope here on these things. Anyway its about the political turmoil of the turn of the 5th Century in Rome. After work I'm gonna finish polishing up the biblographical references and read through it again in search of other revisions to make, and then turn it in. Feedback is appreciated. Alright, gotta scamper.
Other conclusions I would have liked to develop but there's a lack of source material on these things: (1) Gerontius & Constans never liked eachother? (2) Galla Placidia was a source of the tension between Constantius & Adaulf (probably not but that would be kind of romantic in a hollywood kind of way) (2B) Maybe Galla Placidia was never an unwilling hostage of Adaulf in the first place? (3) Sarus is a Catholic? (mainly because his rivals are all the opposing form of Christianity, Arianism) (4) How the crap does Priscus Allectus declare himself emperor, then get over it, and remain everyone's friend? (5) etc etc
Other conclusions I would have liked to develop but there's a lack of source material on these things: (1) Gerontius & Constans never liked eachother? (2) Galla Placidia was a source of the tension between Constantius & Adaulf (probably not but that would be kind of romantic in a hollywood kind of way) (2B) Maybe Galla Placidia was never an unwilling hostage of Adaulf in the first place? (3) Sarus is a Catholic? (mainly because his rivals are all the opposing form of Christianity, Arianism) (4) How the crap does Priscus Allectus declare himself emperor, then get over it, and remain everyone's friend? (5) etc etc
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Date: 2006-06-15 04:34 pm (UTC)As you wrote:
Theodosius I, last emperor of a united Rome, died in 395. Though the generally accepted end of the Roman Empire in 476 was still several generations away, the empire would almost immediately descend into bitter infighting which would make the empire a dysfunctional shadow of its former self and eventually lead to its demise.
I would change to:
Though the generally accepted end of the Roman Empire in 476 was still several generation in the future, the death of Theodosius in 395 sparked an almost immediate descent into bitter infighting...
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Date: 2006-06-15 04:35 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-06-15 05:38 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-06-15 06:30 pm (UTC)I did only read a page or two, because I'm busy, then I sped to the end. Along the way, however, I do think you used transitional wording so that it doesn't read too much like a list. You also have put in evaluation as you go. To the extent that you haven't done that, that's what is important. Good luck.